enjoyable reads guys ..
Ink - before I forget .. "I’m breathing ever breathe.." < huh? .. apart from the wording throwing me and forcing me to stop reading to review this line .. the flow was good .. for text, it 'looks' like the lines are too varied in length to flow as well as this did .. but the rhymes did feel like they hit at the right times for this to lace a beat .. the ending made me laugh as you made a subtle but nice twist on the "blank stare" part of the topic .. worked well and I enjoyed the piece .. a well written story and a well balanced open mic .. good stuff ..
IV - haha .. cool little twist on the author .. the read was steady and solid but didn't read quite as fluidly as inkwell's .. decent rhyming with regards to vocab in the multis .. I did have my mind wonder during Part II when I had a few flashbacks of last night's
.. like I said, I liked how you flipped the reality aspect so that it makes the whole thing based on a true story .. just branded with your own flavour on it .. another straight read with little negatives ..
Vote = Inkwell .. this is pretty close in most technical issues with the only real difference (with those in mind) is that Ink's piece had a stronger flow for me .. but there wasn't really anything wrong with IV's .. so I take this to where votes are at their best .. "personnal preference" .. it's a credit to you both that this battle allows this kind of vote .. cos so many battles can be voted/brokendown and a vote is based more like "Vote=MC A - cos his mechanics outshone even tho MC A's verse wasn't that intereting" .. I like humour in verses and again .. you both bought that .. in the end .. overall .. I just found that Ink's verse entertained me more ..
good shit though fellas .. hope you appreciate the long winded vote ..