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S.Issue - First and foremost this shit reminded me of my piece. Same picture, same step dad molesting, hell almost the same girl's name. I don't know, I guess it was alright how the transition went from abuse in her childhood and carried over to her corporate career, but I didn't see anything creative with the take on the picture (either of them). Flow and structure wasn't bad, story itself was meh.
RICO - First off, wtf @ this structure? Why the dots and two for one lines? I enjoyed your story more, although it was pretty cliche, I felt like you brought something alittle more unique to the table. I think I would have liked it alot more if the structure was divided up better, and I'm pretty sure you would still make the line limit, and the flow was pretty good too.
I'm giving my vote to RICO based on the fact that I felt like he had a better story idea and executed his idea better.
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