[Quriosity]

tekneek, you damn near surprised me here with a strong writer's voice and good descriptions throughout, two major faults though that i feel hurt the impact of the story and that is [1] the fact that the emotional tie wasn't present and [2] there was an entire missing segment to complete the story, the two go hand in hand because i feel that the missing segment would/should have delivered the emotional value that a story of this caliber would have needed to leave that lasting impression, but as is you had a verse packed with facts and descriptions but never actually portraying the agony of the actual tragedy that took place, you just skipped around it and it felt incomplete as i read, you should have described the event in the same detail that you described everything else but actually during the event which would have displayed emotion by default had you done it right, instead you just kind of covered before and after and never really touched on the actual event in which the story was based upon, the flow was decent throughout, sometimes a little wordy but overall a good enough flow to keep reading, wording was good for the most part and there werent many/any grammatical errors or spelling that i can remember, overall this was pretty good but you fell short of topics potential

got life?, the tie in to the topic was weak, seemed as though you started writing and just tried to make it fit, it also threw me off because the narrator/husband didnt seem to be hurt so who's open wounds did blood run from?, regardless --i think you delivered the more complete verse here, this would have been a tough decision had tek stuck to the script and finished the story, your flow as always was good enough to keep reading in which this case i felt that it started better than it ended, the format/structure in which you unraveled the story worked well for this piece by introducing each character and then tying their deaths to their sexual characteristics, i can't say it was creative but then again i can't say that it wasn't, typical murder piece from you minus the pure insanity, the story progressed smoothly in the beginning and then rapidly in the end but it all still seemed to work for the most part, overall this was a decent plot with a weak take on the topic written fairly well and in a more complete and consice manner than your opponents

honestly, this is probably the closest match that i have read as of yet, but tek fell short in areas that would have pulled him through in the end, as is i think the more complete verse gets the nod here, nothing extraordinary from either participant and i really feel that tek could have won here but GL, as usual, does just enough to get the W

so, vote - got life?