god dammit @ another child getting molested .. you sick fucks .. lol ..
Iss - raised your game a bit this week .. the last few weeks you have been a little off but this was back on track as far as the writing standard goes .. flow was good and the read was kept interesting and smooth .. the transitions mergred well and the idea was ok .. yet another reference to child rape but I think it was more a reference as this seemed more geared toward the idea of women using their sexuality for gain .. the imagery was a little lacking in areas but in general it was a straight read ..
RICO - this is text .. so first thing I point out is the format of structure you went with here .. it wasn't needed .. you only had 50 lines anyway .. so to merge bars wasn't needed to create 25 lines here .. it didn't need the dots splitting the mini verses either .. to say that the lines were technically short ~ this didn't really flow great but I guess it wasn't bad either .. the story was fairly interesting although I was expecting her to have died in that crash and the story to have taken a twist in that direction .. maybe you get credit for surprising me with our ending .. or maybe you don't based on it not being the most interesting or creative ending .. lol .. iono .. it was straight though ..
Vote = jeez .. this is too close to call in all honesty .. wait a sec .. *gets out the abacus*
Aspect - Iss - RICO
Flow - 7 - 6
Vocab - 5 - 5
Multies - 0 - 1
Imagery - 6 - 5
Plot/Concept - 6 - 6
Originiality - 5 - 6
Entertainment Value - 7 - 6
Initial Reaction Score - 6 - 6
that's how close this shit is for me .. but by my math ..
Vote = S.Issue .. barely taking this .. could go either way .. g'luck to you both ..