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this league is bloody obsessed with child molesting ..
Return - all the hype about Little Linda .. and this is it? .. big let down .. the writing was of the usual good standard with regards to mechanics of verses .. flowed well etc. .. but the theme of child molesting is seriously overused in this league .. I don't think a single week has gone by without atleast 1 story involving a kid being raped .. and the fact it's the mother's new guy is even less 'original' .. that aside however .. this was approached from a not so graphic and hands on (excuse the pun) narrative of the rapes .. so the fact it's more about how she deals with it is duely noted .. and yeah .. atleast it wasn't the old "so she killed him" kinda plot .. all in all .. it was uninspired by you standards but as with you standards ~ the level of writing was good ..
Apo - first things first .. proof read your shit kid .. spelling and grammar mistakes all over the show here .. and it's not me being picky but as a reader (and a voter) that can stick out like a sore thumb when it happens so often .. the story itself was ok .. again .. the child molesting business is starting to get tiresome .. but your story was a little more interesting than the usual child rape format .. this was more of a "moving on" kinda concept and fitted the topic rather well if a little predictable in approach .. short bars helped the flow but the grammar then hurt the flow as I was left stumbling over lines and having to repeat things ..
Vote = TheReturn .. this was close to a major upset .. and any TR haters could certainly create a breakdown fitting of voting the other way .. Apo had the chance to take down the top seed in the 1st round .. as TR didn't really bring an exciting or entertaining read this week .. his solid mechanics have helped here cos the stories themselves were about even for me .. close .. but the better writer takes it ..
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