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Old 01-11-2008, 07:04 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Vote: will edit vote in later...just deciphered DAD's fucking shit.

Dad - First off...I can't believe I actually wasted my time deciphering all of that...hopeing that it would somehow make your piece better or bring it together...instead this was some of the most dragging and lifeless piece of writing i've read in a long time...you need to spend more time on your writing than on trying to pull some coding out of a hat...

Quote:
RN KVIUVXGRLM KVIHLMRURVW, Z TLW MLG BVG KILKSVHRAVW

IM PERFECTION PERSONIFIED, A GOD NOT YET PROPHESIZED

Z GRGZM DZRGRMT GL YV RWLORAVW YB RWOV VBVH

A TITAN WAITING TO BE IDOLIZED BY IDLE EYES

HL ZH BLF IVZORAV GSV DLIOWH WVNRHV, IVXLTMRAV NB HFKIVNZXB

SO AS YOU REALIZE THE WORLDS DEMISE, RECOGNIZE MY SUPREMACY

NB YRIGS DZH Z YOVHHRMT, BLFI WVZGSH Z MVXVHHRGB

MY BIRTH WAS A BLESSING, YOUR DEATHS A NECESSITY

HL SZGV NB NVGSLWH YFG ZWLIV GSV IVHG LU NV

SO HATE MY METHODS BUT ADORE THE REST OF ME

ZH ML LMV XLFOW XOZRN GSVB TLG GSV YVHG LU NV

AS NO ONE COULD CLAIM THEY GOT THE BEST OF ME

YFG NB XLMHXRVMXV SZFMGVW DSZG DZH OVUG LU NV

BUT MY CONSCIENCE HAUNTED WHAT WAS LEFT OF ME

HL GL NZPV GSV ELRXVH HGLK, OVG GSRH YV NB LMOB TLLW WVVW

SO TO MAKE THE VOICES STOP, LET THIS BE MY ONLY GOOD DEED

GSV XFIV RH SRWWVM DSVIV OLHG HLFOH QLFIMVB GL YV UIVVW

THE CURE IS HIDDEN WHERE LOST SOULS JOURNEY TO BE FREED

GSV ZMHDVI RHMG ZH XLNKORXZGVW ZH RG HVVNH

THE ANSWER ISNT AS COMPLICATED AS IT SEEMS

RM LGSVI DLIWH GSV XFIV IVHRWVH SRWWVM RMHRWV BLFI WIVZNH

IN OTHER WORDS THE CURE RESIDES HIDDEN INSIDE YOUR DREAMS

TLLWYBV XIFVO DLIOW. R DRM ZTZRM

GOODBYE CRUEL WORLD. I WIN AGAIN
Vern - I think i've written to many gore pieces because reading your piece, i'm like...it's either the daughter or kristen moore is bi-polar...the ending worked...the rhyming was smooth and the story just pulled you in so much that it just all worked...nothing over the top this week, but just a great execution...

the daughter confronting the mother, the mother realizing her bi-polar disorder, yet still killing her...

it just works.

vote = Vada.
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