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Third match I've read...Definitely the best so far...
DIC gets my vote here...
ASK, as I was reading yours, I was hoping that you weren't going the direction you ended up going, not because it wasn't a good direction, but because I wanted to lol. I wouldn't have done it exactly like that, but once I got a hint that there was some sort of abuse, I thought damn, I wish I had thought of that first. So anyways, I'm pleased with the content of your piece. Your flow was pretty straight for the most part and stuff was more or less well-worded throughout. As far as DIC is concerned, I wouldn't have ever thought to write about that, but I fucking should have given the fact that I'm a bit of a amateur photographer myself. Damn you heathen. Pretty cool story. I found myself interested throughout. The flow was very smooth and the rhymes, more so that usual, were pretty much devoid of 'forceage' lol. I don't really watch the show much to know who any of them are, but I thought the story would have been fine even without that information.
The big difference in this battle was the technical shit. ASK had a lot of detail but was pretty low on rhyming. DIC had pretty good descriptions in his but he also had superior rhyming in this case. So if the concepts were pretty equal, the execution favored DIC and that's why I went that direction. Best battle I've read so far though. Glad you all showed.
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