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Street Poet · 01-29-2007, 10:27 PM

Brains -- reaaaal smooth narration/diction fused with lyricism i'm feeling the shit out of it...the imagery was also exploited well by that writers voice that was somber, to go along with the somber tone of the piece, very nice....Your story didnt seem to original but everything else was on the ball

DK -- this was a very personal piece, i feel....its like your writing one of your war stories to us from the camp. I liked the narration it was clean-cut, and the imagery wasn't as gorey as i expected it to be but it was still cool.....My problem is the writers voice didn't feel as into-the-piece as it should have because of the nature of the verse

this was a quick vote fyi...im just knocking'em down since i wont be getting any

Vote -- brains for an overall more gripping story,

good battle

01-29-2007, 10:27 PM	#15 (permalink)
Street Poet Walk2theBeat,Talk2theBeat Join Date: May 2004 Location: at an Open Mic speaking the unspoken truth Posts: 4,147	Brains -- reaaaal smooth narration/diction fused with lyricism i'm feeling the shit out of it...the imagery was also exploited well by that writers voice that was somber, to go along with the somber tone of the piece, very nice....Your story didnt seem to original but everything else was on the ball DK -- this was a very personal piece, i feel....its like your writing one of your war stories to us from the camp. I liked the narration it was clean-cut, and the imagery wasn't as gorey as i expected it to be but it was still cool.....My problem is the writers voice didn't feel as into-the-piece as it should have because of the nature of the verse this was a quick vote fyi...im just knocking'em down since i wont be getting any Vote -- brains for an overall more gripping story, good battle __________________ Lazy Summer Days.....