Thread: Counting The Times
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Old 04-27-2005, 08:27 PM   #6 (permalink)
Brit Boi Gee
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you seem to have an intricate way with words that really make the reader stop and think 'What is going on? What is the meaning behind such and such?' In places it seemed a little muddled as if it was 'stream of conciousness' and flitting around but this seemed like a good effect also. Nice poem. My fave part was:

under the flourescent glow of each underscoring star
the moon's charm evaded invasion for one lonesome night

Why?

because it was most poetical.

Keep it up!
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