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Yes, the old Chyll!!!!!!!
No, seriously... this is one of my favorite pieces by you.
"laying in every field
under the flourescent glow of each underscoring star
the moon's charm evaded invasion for one lonesome night
and it was just you and i
so wasn't it lonely those nights you spent crying for freedom?
wasn't it lonely those days you broke your back in non-sexual ways...
only to reconfigure your spinal cord with tissue after tissue?
you did hit a cord with me... just not that kind of one
i'm sorry
"write on"
Damn, this was brilliant. Honestly, I don't like how you re-wrote this stanza towards the ending, but it worked.
Loved "right on"/"write on" ... clever, and randomly awesome lol.
"or i wouldn't be standing here... broken hearted
waiting for your phone call... too afraid of berserk parents
or i wouldn't have written off life so many times tonight
or made too many assumptions about life in general"
Yes... loved this. I can relate to it... dope shit man. Real dope shit...
Keep writing duke..
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"lil wayne, who do you think is going to win the ravens titans game?"
"well....i really think ray allen is a threat from deep, and if paul pierece can penetrate he can get enough coverage to kick it out to him all day"
"so yeah, my prediction goes to the raptors"
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