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Atreyu:
it was a good story, and with a little more polished and smooth writing, you could have made this a great verse overall...it did have rough edges, but you showed me a lot in terms of variety, because you went with a more accessible story than your standard...good job, but as i said, wording definitely had plenty of rough edges.
Infinite Truth:
you are a great writer...the only problem with this was that the ending wasn't as complete as i would have liked it to be, which i understand entirely is because part three will be coming next week...you developed an entrancing love story and wrote it very well...sometimes i think you put repetition/variation on borderline overkill, but still...very well done.
vote=Infinite Truth
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