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Atheist- I liked your shit, you were descriptive, and you write as if you were writting in a book. I likes that. You're creative, I couldnt tell what topic you were on about until I saw at the end. I had little hints in the back of my mind like hmmm, I wonder what topic he's doing, but I can see it now. Flow was on point, rhyme scheme I liked, somewhat similar to mine. You delivered this topic nicely.
Yung Imp- You delivered nicely too, I can somewhat tell what your topic was about just from reading it. But, at first I was like hmmm, is he talking about his dad being the beast, could be, but then I understood where you were coming from. You've got a good storytelling ability, and your descriptiveness is pretty nice, I just think you need to work on your flow and being more creative with your story, add some twists in there, make people try and figure out what your topic is about. You feel me.
Vote- Atheist.. overall just had a better topical.
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