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Old 09-30-2004, 08:40 PM   #9 (permalink)
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Insanity takes it up the butt!
Atheist- nice shit, very emotional, descriptive, poetic. Liking it a lot. Really put across a great topical piece.

Yung- You do have a good thought for description. The only thing holding you back is the ability to ellaborate on that, perhaps put it across in a more complex manner. That is what seperates the good from the great in this league. Overall you just got out-written.

Atheist had the better description, rhyme scheme, and better story.

Vote- Atheist
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