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Ibeechur moms, you started this up slow, really realistic... maybe too realistic for my taste. but i got through it , understood it and got to the second part. It was nice, it flowed well, it was deep, metaphorical and just completely different from the first part. That passage made me say dammm..... emotional..... Overall, you suffered bad for the lack of flow and emotion in the first part of your piece, but you ended it well.
Anaphora.
At first when i was reading your verse i thought it was about a completely different thing, and of different genre, i actually took it for psychotic emotional babble that i come across once in a while. and it was. it was. only the finisher turned it all around and made it what it is and shone light on the whole story so i coulld understand it. flow was perfect. the beginning passage was nice. which also was only fully undesrtood after i finished the piece.
Well written.
Surprised or not i thought this was close, Moms' came with emotion that could so closely be related to himself, and anaphora came with an ill surprising story.
Vote = Anaphora
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