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iNFINITE Truth, I liked the story outline, but the flow was off and the structure was aukward, but very poetical and I did like that alot. the story was whimsicle in it vocab and everything and gave an appearance of a boy's summer vacation or something. very nice writing
Tekneek, great vision here. strong flow moved the story along nicely and made it wasy to follow. the actions of gazing up at orange clouds sounds heavenly, like envisioning afterlife. I thought this was a well rounded written piece all the way through.
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